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Falcon3100 Mortal
Posts : 158 Join date : 2012-09-14 Age : 26 Location : Behind you
| Subject: My Half Blood (new version) 9/14/2012, 11:50 pm | |
| Full Name:
Henry Williams
Any Nicknames?
Hank
Age:
14
Years at camp:
2
God and Mortal parent:
Hephaetus and Mary Williams
Date of birth:
June, 23 1998
Place of birth:
Boston, Massechussets
Appearance:
Brown hair, blue eyes, usually wears a black or white t-shirt, and oops almost forgot straight hair, usually wears khakis, 6ft. 4, Tall, skinny, Nice (means will defend others when they are in need)
Style: (I am gonna leave this on blank)
Powers:
I can control two machines with my mind at max when I use this power and I can use it twice a day but every time I use it I get very tired but I can barely fight.
Fatal Flaw:
My fatal flaw is that I am skeptic. It is fatal because I can easily be lured to a trap if they threaten my friends. I can surrender easily when my friends are near the doors of death. Being a skeptic can easily bring me to my doom. When I hear that my friends are in danger I will stop at nothing to save them.
Flaws: Not good a soccer, bad with regular animals
Weapon:
Celestial bronze axe
Pets:
(no pets)
Talents:
Able two create any weapon
Rp example:
"WHY DID YOU TAKE MY FRIENDS?" I yelled. "Ah good question lets just say they are a GIFT" the monster said. " YOU BRING THEM BACK" I yelled. "How bout no" the monster said calmly. The monster takes out a sword. " I won't lose" I said and I drew out my sword ready to fight.
Biography:
My name is Henry, but, you can call me hank. After I was born strange things have happend, like when a little dragon snuck into my room when I was 5 somehow I pulled his wings of with my hands. Second, I learned that I could create tons of different machines. It was pretty fun at first but then I got oil in my eyes ( it hurt like Tartarus) so I decided not to do it for awhile. Now even stranger things are happening I ran into this place called Camp Halfblood and they say it's for people just like me. Things are looking brighter now I hope they stay like that.
Last edited by Falcon3100 on 9/15/2012, 5:42 pm; edited 5 times in total | |
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Rachel Draconic Overlord
Posts : 14476 Join date : 2010-04-05 Age : 27
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 4:11 am | |
| I'm sorry, but I'm afraid we can't hand out Big Three god parents to just anyone. They're pretty powerful, y'know. If you really want one, I suggest RPing on the site for a while, then submitting an application to an administrator for a demititan/Big Three. | |
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Zwn (Zoe in Greek) officer, i just want you to know that i'm not like other girls; i'm cute and quirky
Posts : 8143 Join date : 2010-04-18 Location : bed
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 10:07 am | |
| Also, for the RP example, you're not supposed to use the star things to show who's speaking or what's going on. It's supposed to be like a book, where you write out the action. So, instead of
- Quote :
- *yells* WHY DID YOU TAKE MY FRIENDS?!
it would be more like
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- "WHY DID YOU TAKE MY FRIENDS?" I yell.
Also, one the question mark would be necessary, because you said that they were yelling, plus it was in all caps, which lets the reader know they're yelling or speaking loudly. | |
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Falcon3100 Mortal
Posts : 158 Join date : 2012-09-14 Age : 26 Location : Behind you
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 10:37 am | |
| Ok thank you for telling me | |
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Falcon3100 Mortal
Posts : 158 Join date : 2012-09-14 Age : 26 Location : Behind you
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 1:10 pm | |
| Ok I made a new version hope you like it | |
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Dexter Minor God
Posts : 8306 Join date : 2011-01-14 Age : 27
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 4:43 pm | |
| Ok, One we'd prefer it if you didn't double post, but thank you for making a new version of the form all the same.
Now. Onto business. How much does controlling the machines drain them. Also how does he control the machine? Does he just bark orders at it like it's a slave or is it like a PuppetMaster type thing where he actually makes the movements with is body and the machine copies those movements as best as he can. And one more thing, how many times a day can he control one or 2 machines? | |
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Falcon3100 Mortal
Posts : 158 Join date : 2012-09-14 Age : 26 Location : Behind you
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 5:09 pm | |
| O yeah sorry bOut that I can control the machines with my mind. Example: I see a machine I think turn on then it would turn on. I can only do this twice a day. And lastly controlling the machines drains about half of their motor, but, if I get unlucky there a chance the whole machine might rust. ( btw what's double post I've never heard of it?). | |
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Dexter Minor God
Posts : 8306 Join date : 2011-01-14 Age : 27
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 5:30 pm | |
| Check your PM's..revise your limits according to what I told you through that, and then edit all the limits into your form and I can approve this character. | |
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Falcon3100 Mortal
Posts : 158 Join date : 2012-09-14 Age : 26 Location : Behind you
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 6:52 pm | |
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Dexter Minor God
Posts : 8306 Join date : 2011-01-14 Age : 27
| Subject: Re: My Half Blood (new version) 9/15/2012, 11:57 pm | |
| Hmm...Your descriptiveness...will need work..but that will have to be dealt with over time.
As for the character I don't really see anything else wrong with it so Approved. | |
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